I'm not confident in my writing would someone tell me what they thought of this poem and short story?

It depends what age group your going after.this seems like an age group for 11 + . if this is right ages 11 - 14 will find it like a task. finding out what words mean . it will almost teach them a little about some words. 15-18 will find this adventurous and funny as it has the right words for their age group.19+ will get the story a lot more and will understand it a lot more but the humour will apeal less to them. they will enjoy reading this story and poem more than any other age group for as i have mentioned before they understand the words. For young children will not understand and will get frustrated easily reading these. I am in the age group 11-14 and understand this quite a bit.